Lettre de motivation en Anglais :) need help !

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moschoden

Bonjour à toutes et à tous, je viens solliciter votre aide dans l'urgence. Je dois rendre vendredi une lettre de motivation pour mon dossier de candidature à un programme d'échange avec une université Anglaise. J'ai donc rédiger cette lettre mais je souhaite que l'on me la corrige. Pourriez-vous m'aider svp !
MERCI par avance.

Voici la lettre en question:

Dear Sir or Madam

After having discussed with the person in charge of the International Relations of the Nantes Institute of Economic and Management (IEMN), on the opportunities offered to the students concerning studying abroad, I decided to fill in an application form.

Being nowadays in “licence en science de gestion” (equivalents to a Bachelor’s degree in Management), I would like to specialize myself in the International Management. In this field an English good level is recommended and I think it is indispensable to be able to talk it. I study English since the school, and I realized that the best way to master a language was to go in a country to communicate with the inhabitants, and studying in this language.

Moreover, to be able to adapt and to develop a broader outlook on the world, are, to my mind, two important qualities for my future profession in Management.
Having already accomplished some travel in various countries abroad as Italia, United-States… I think I have developed a capacity of adaptation, but I want to discover new ways of working.

Dundee is a city which attracts me, due to its history, its culture and Scientifics activities. Its rich architecture is a further argument that convinces me to choose this destination.
Worker and sociable, I want to come to your university to give me more personal and professional enrichment.

Yours faithfully,

Xxxxx XXXXXX

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capitaineigloo

bah comme toutes les textes en anglais rédigés par des francais :

ca fait trop francais traduit (presque) mot à mot . Certaines tournures de phrase sont typiquement francaises.

exemple bete :

Citation :

Dundee is a city which attracts me

pourquoi faire compliqué quand on peut faire simple

I like Dundee (City) because blablabla...

moschoden

Ok, mais encore ?

thadawg

Putting knowledge into heads

Dundee is an attractive city.

_Quant_

Relis-toi pour commencer: "to talk it", "I study English since the school"...

Kouni

C'est bien de vouloir partir, ton anglais est pas mal mais sent encore le franglish à plein nez. C'est surtout les problèmes de conjugaison les plus gênants (le "I study english since school" ). Corrigé en vitesse :

Citation :

Dear Sir or Madam,

After discussing the opportunities offered to the students to study abroad with the person in charge of International Relations at the Nantes Institute of Economic and Management (IEMN), I decided to fill in an application form.

Currently a student in “licence en science de gestion” (equivalents to a Bachelor’s degree in Management), I would like to specialize in International Management. In this field it is recommended to be proficient in English and I think it is indispensable to be able to speak it fluently. I've studied English since primary school, and I think that the best way to master a language is to stay in the country to communicate with the inhabitants and to follow courses in this language.

Moreover, the ability to adapt and to develop a broader outlook on the world are two important qualities for my future job in Management.
Having already traveled in various countries such as Italia, the United States, and so on, I think I have developped a capacity for adaptation, but I still want to discover new ways of working.

Dundee is an attractive city, due to its history, its culture and scientific life. The richness of the city's architecture is a further argument driving me to choose this destination.
Hardworking and sociable, I would be honoured to come to your University and benefit from this experience both personally and a professionally.

Yours faithfully,

Xxxxx XXXXXX

moschoden

Merci beaucoup, votre aide m'est précieuse.

Berg1910

Pour avoir vécu à Dundee, c'est pas du tout une "attractive city"... :lol:
Et je sais pas où tu as vu que l'architecture de la ville était riche! :ouch:

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Éventuellement il peut parler de la richesse du programme qu'il aspire à intégrer

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